I, Seydou, disagree with the statement “teenagers are lazy monsters”. I feel this way because it is out of their hands as youths (who at the time are likely to be going through puberty) uncontrollably behave in the manner that gives off their lazy monster impression. Furthermore, although I may not be a teenager, I still feel strongly about the issue and have an understanding of the challenges they face. The statement implies that teenagers (the so-called beasts) are lazy monsters although I feel that the majority are affected by the minority who wouldn’t like to be portrayed as having a monster-like persona.
I believe that saying teens are lazy is a misjudgment and has a negative impact. This means it could deeply affect the way they view, respect and treat adults as many look up to adults as role models. After being called lazy monsters over and over again, which would essentially be provoking the teens, they start to take on the role of behaving like lazy monsters (even though it’s not their true personality).
I think it is unfortunate that most teens are forced to go to bed early because they have difficult sleep patterns. Melatonin may affect everyone but the darkness hormone strikes teens harder than any other age range, due to the hours it kicks in. Adults produce the hormone at 10pm, teens on the other hand produce it at 1am with a three hour difference. The number may not sound incredibly large but actually affects them deeply as it has an outcome of many hours of sleep being lost. It means less focus towards education because of a natural process. View this scenario, so as you probably know the expected minimum of sleep is eight hours which is easily passed when sleeping at 1am. If of course the teen has the determination of going to school and getting there on time (also showing that them being ‘lazy’ not done on purpose) after waking up at eight which I highly doubt having only slept seven hours, they will then have only 45 minutes to eat, take a shower and then the journey to school etc. That’d be alright if the school starts late but could be difficult as many start at half past eight or earlier!
Moreover I disagree with teenager being viewed lazy, mainly because after a catastrophic morning they then must go through six lessons (depending on your school) after Only seven hours of sleep, with around two of those lessons being disliked as only being human not everyone enjoys all subjects. After some lessons comes an exhausting, energy wasting lesson which we all know is P.E taking place in the scorching heat which would be essentially be draining all your last ounces of energy meaning that for all your other lessons including the ones you may actually enjoy you’d be too worn out to even give it a shot and try so even if you were really looking forward to the subject you’d sleep right through it, because instead of looking forward to enjoying the lesson you’d be more focused on getting a few hours of sleep, even though you’d feel replenished after the lesson you will earned a detention (this will probably happen throughout different lessons until you are finally replenished) which is why I disagree with the statement that teenagers are lazy as they aren’t always trying to slouch off but are just feeling the toll and effect of being a few hours behind.
The teenagers of today are practically living the life of an adult or I think could possibly be even harder! I know it’s a bold claim however the adults get less challenging work and tasks to cope within the day on the contrary the teens (remember who are still developing) must go through things they have never ever seen or gone through (like put a polar bear in the desert) on top of that they then have their afternoon full with homework so again aren’t able to catch up with sleep. Which in my eyes is good that they’re being mentally pushed but I Still hold the case of it possibly being harder than the life of an adult. I Also know that melatonin is only a single hormone going through any and all teenagers body as many more circulate through them. Such as mood swings causing them to switch in an instant. They change from laughing to a full on rage in the blink of an eye, giving the impression of being metaphorical monster. However I still have the concept that calling a teenager a monster I think puts people down, just because of being in a certain age range, and that is the age range where you are most likely to learn and focus on the foundations of certain skills and knowledge but instead are being affected by a crude comment.
The metaphor of being a lazy monster, is highly amusing for me as the very thought of on your 13th birthday transforming into an apparent lazy monster. More to the point many with the slightest bit of common sense knows that there isn’t a sudden change when you turn 13 and when you turn 20 years old when you supposedly turn from a monster to a respected adult. Once being known as a lazy monster more and more people determined to try to prove everyone else wrong showing that the way they are acting isn’t done on purpose. l have this view because referring to them as what’s usually seen as a grotesque vile creature who usually causes irritation to others, can be effective to how they grow up and their livelihood. all of these reasons are why I disagree with the point teenagers are lazy monsters.
March 21, 2015 at 10:40 am
I like the way you have begun to explore stereotypes and the responsibility of parents in relation to this debate topic.
Targets:
Look at the criteria for this badge:
http://achieve.community.edutronic.net/stage-two-writing/expository-essay/
What do you still need to do in order to achieve this? For instance, you have 600 words to go!
Learn the difference between their, they’re and there.
How will you achieve the Perfect Paragraph badge?
http://achieve.community.edutronic.net/stage-one-writing/perfect-paragraph/
April 20, 2015 at 7:57 pm
Nearly there.
There are a few things you’ll need to do to secure the Expository badge.
Targets
1) pay attention to the end of your first paragraph – how might you make your meaning clearer? Always re-read and edit sentence structures – don’t forget to use those full stops.
Where else will you need to do this?
2) Avoid staying sentences with conjunctions (and, also, but, because)
3)How will you achieve the Perfect Paragraph badge?
http://achieve.community.edutronic.net/stage-one-writing/perfect-paragraph/
April 29, 2015 at 11:52 pm
You are so very nearly there – look at your first paragraph – your meaning is lost because you have not proof-read and used punctuation appropriately.
Target:
Aim to re-read and edit your sentence structures throughout. How might you make your meaning clearer?
May 6, 2015 at 1:45 pm
Please try not to add any more, but refine the work that you have – your introduction, for instance needs to be made clearer. Look at your second sentence – where have you confused of with have? How else can your meaning be made clearer?
Your second paragraph is one long sentence, for instance.
May 13, 2015 at 1:32 pm
Nearly there, but not just yet.
I can see that you have edited your work but you need to have another attempt at this.
My previous targets still stand.
See me if you need some help.
June 3, 2015 at 8:24 am
Hello Seydou,
You’ve really done a lot of work here but the major thing that stops you achieving the badge is your sentence length and structure.
Please re-read this and edit it thoroughly, paying particular attention to paragraphs 2-4.
Where else is some attention needed?
Thanks,
Mr North
June 3, 2015 at 7:05 pm
Where have you repeated yourself between your first and second paragraph? How can you tackle/avoid this?
Where else is this an issue?
How might you be more formal?
Nearly there,
Mr North